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Post by May on Dec 4, 2006 17:10:26 GMT -5
OOPSIE!!! I forgot about the fireworks in cahpter 8...oopsie!
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Post by May on Dec 5, 2006 21:37:04 GMT -5
PLEASE COMMENT!!   Chapter 11- "What?" Karen changed to a soft voice, "No..no, you can't Kai." "Why?" He asked with a dissapointed look. "Pop-" "I don't love her like I love Cl-" "Hey guys!" Claire interuppted, panting, "Sorry I'm late." "Oh, that's fine," Karen said sarcasticly. Kai glared at Karen Claire blew. "Are you guys not telling me something!?!" Karen closed her eyes and shook her head with dissapointment. "Come with me," Kai requested. Karen's eyes shot open. Kai led her out of the bar, they silently walked to Mineral Beach. "Sit," he ordered. Claire made herself comfertable on the bench. Kai cleared his throat and began, "I- I- umm..well, It's Summer 28th, and uh, well, I'm leaving soon." "Why?" "Well, Claire, I only come in the Summer, because it's so cold here in winter," he answered. Now, he was talking fast, "I just wanted to tell you, well, before I leave, and before you have a new boyfriend or move or something, that I-" "Stop," Claire whispered. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Should I continue? |
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Post by May on Dec 5, 2006 21:38:29 GMT -5
I hope you like the last two chapters
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Post by earthgoddess on Dec 5, 2006 22:50:25 GMT -5
love it..what's claire gonna say? @_@
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Post by May on Dec 6, 2006 7:53:10 GMT -5
Hmmm...You'll find out later!  Muhahaha...haha...haa.... lol. |
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Post by earthgoddess on Dec 6, 2006 14:58:43 GMT -5
NOOOO!! @_@ lol
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Post by May on Dec 6, 2006 18:40:15 GMT -5
lol. Hehe. Revvenge!!!! Muahaha haha hahaha ha! lol.
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Post by May on Dec 6, 2006 18:40:36 GMT -5
Please write more on your story! It's awesome! |
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Post by May on Dec 6, 2006 18:48:59 GMT -5
Okey dokey! Thanks for the comments! Well, 12 is my favorite number, and this is the 12th chapter, so I'm hoping it will turn out good! Wish me luck! lol.
Chapter 12<3-
"Kai-" She broke off.
Kai wrapped his arm around her neck, trying to confort her.
A tear dropped onto the white sand, turning it into what looked like mud.
"Don't you hate it when something beautiful turns into something ugly?" She asked Kai, barely thinking before talking.
Kai blinked, still silent.
"A tear can change everything." She said.
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Sorry, another short chapter!
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Post by May on Dec 8, 2006 19:28:45 GMT -5
I'm sad...No comments for me...
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Post by earthgoddess on Dec 8, 2006 21:47:01 GMT -5
sorry, it's hard to comment on a 6 line chapter ^_^;;;
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Post by May on Dec 9, 2006 10:29:21 GMT -5
Yeah...I have a problem with that...sorry. *sigh* I'll make them longer, I know they are short, I just like to make good endings to the chapters. Thanks for the comment! I'll check out your fanfic!
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Post by May on Dec 9, 2006 10:51:40 GMT -5
Thank you for the comment, earthgoddess!!
Chapter 13-
"Kai, this isn't you..." Claire stated.
"What do you mean?"
"You're the funny ladiesman, or something like that, well that's what everyone says," Claire explained.
"But not with you." Kai was turning his answered into a limited amout of sylables.
"Kai, I like you the way you are."
"I am who I am, right now."
"No your not. You are sensitive and...ughh!" Claire said, disgusted.
Kai sighed. "Claire, I am trying to tell you something!"
"What then? That you love me? I don't believe you. Yo-y-y-you..just...I am leaving!" Claire said, he face soaked with tears. By now, she was standing in front of Kai, screaming.
She turned, and ran.
"I love you," Kai whispered, he knew she wouldn't hear.
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*I DON'T WANT TO WAKE UP!* Claire screamed in her head. After last night's fight, she never wanted to scream out loud again.
It was Saturday, cooking lessons. She had to be at Anna's house by 10, so she stumbled outside to do her chores.
"Hi." A voice greeted.
Claire stopped staring at her feet, and looked up to see who was in the doorway. Karen.
"I don't want to talk," Claire whispered.
"What happend, girl?"
"Kai...I don't believe him."
"Of course you don't, he's like that."
"No, I like when he is who he is...but last night, he was different, that's when I don't believe him."
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Post by May on Dec 9, 2006 10:52:07 GMT -5
Sorry, that chapter was bad. I needed to wrap up the fight...
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Post by earthgoddess on Dec 10, 2006 15:44:54 GMT -5
no, I liked that chapter! IT was awesome ^_^
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Muhahaha...haha...haa.... lol.