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Post by Banika Conchita on Oct 12, 2007 14:18:56 GMT -5
Okay, i forget about the name, but here is the summery.
Eric and Symphony are dating. They love each other a LOT yet Eric's mother HATES Symphony. Her parents beat her, nothing seirous, just a couple of smacks and kicks here and there but they are usually at work. Than Symphony kills herself, so Eric is upset. But then her starts to see her ghost. He talks with it a lot, so basically that is how it goes. There might be more to the storyline later.
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Post by Butterscotch on Oct 12, 2007 14:59:10 GMT -5
The basic concept sounds interesting, but it needs some fleshing out. You need to address why Eric's mom hates Symphony so much.
And why does she kill herself? You say that the beatings aren't that serious, so that can't be why. You need to think about that
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Post by Banika Conchita on Oct 12, 2007 17:12:26 GMT -5
Well Eric's mother is constantly picking on her, (so are the kids at school) She never spends any time with her family and Eric is her only good friend. Eric's mom had a rivalry with Symphony's mom a long time ago, so she believes "The apple doesn't fall far from the tree" i think i might make it more in depth later
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Post by Rozewater on Oct 12, 2007 18:36:04 GMT -5
I like it! Like Butters said, just a little more tweaking and it would be really good!
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Post by Banika Conchita on Oct 13, 2007 20:00:29 GMT -5
I think later in the story i might have Eric get accused of Harassing Symphony
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Post by Rozewater on Oct 13, 2007 20:05:04 GMT -5
Hmmm...that would make things interesting. Just be sure when writing to avoid one of the major pitfalls many writers fall into: going along in the plot too fast, thus not putting in enough detail.
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