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Post by Banika Conchita on Dec 16, 2007 13:31:08 GMT -5
where they start out cold to eachother, then get close and stuff. Thats what I'll probably end up doing. |
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Post by Banika Conchita on Apr 28, 2008 18:08:27 GMT -5
Claire's face shrivled. "Are you kidding me?" He shook his head. "Hell no. I just want a fricken wife. And Hon, you're the only one single. What do you think will happen. You wanna die single?" Claire slowly shook her head. "Yeah, thats what I thought." And Claire accepted the blue feather.
**AT THE ALTAR**
The crowd was stunned. Only 2 weeks and they're hitched. Who knew, eh? "You may kiss the bride." Carter announced. Their first kiss, shared on the altar. Claire puckered her lips like she just ate a lemon. Jack just smiled and leaned in. For Claire it was like sucking on a hamster. For Jack it was like having a vacum cleaner inhale his mouth. When they left the kiss, both were staring at each other in disgust. The first, and worst kiss of their life.
Chapter 2:Starting Up.
Claire awoke to Jack making burning breakfast. "What the hell are you doin to the food?" Jack squinted. "Making breakfast. Pancakes." "They look like black lumps." Claire spat at him. She stood up and grabbed the pan out of his hands. She turned off the stove and tossed out the pancake. "You're having ceral. Don't you ever think of making breakfast again." He frowned. "You're just upset you can't get tounge with the church boy." Claire gasped. "His name is CLIFF, and what is with your attidute? You suck at cooking." Jack just looked at her. "What a b_tch." He said under his breath. "What did you call me?" Claire snapped. Jack sighed.
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Post by May on Apr 28, 2008 19:19:45 GMT -5
I like the idea, it's new and different, but there are some errors with grammar. Please continue! ^.^
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Post by Pickle on Apr 29, 2008 9:04:30 GMT -5
Better then the first part. Keep your chapters toghether, make them a little longer. But I cannot lie: I wanna read more.
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Post by Banika Conchita on Apr 29, 2008 17:26:33 GMT -5
Jack needed air. While Claire yelled and was telling him the proper way to make food. When she turned around,he bolted. Walking down the farm, he heard Claire shout, "JACK!!!!!" And he ran off to the town. He went into Rose Square, and spotted Mary. 'Hello-Hello!" He greeted her cheerfully. Mary looked up at him. "Jack! How are you? Loving the married life?" "Psh. No."Jack said, sitting down. "Hating it."
"Well, what's wrong?"
"Everything."
"Mine is fine. Somthing happen between you and Claire?"
"No."
"So?"
"That's the point! Claire cares nothing for me. She is a cruel, heartless, little bi-" And right before Jack could finish his statment, Claire came along and grabbed his arm. "What are you doing?" He asked. "No, what are you doing?!" Claire shreaked. She pulled him all the way back to the farm, as he struggled to release from her grasp. "Let me go!" Jack yelled. Claire let him go. Jack started to walk off. "Where are you going?" asked Claire. "I'm going to see who is the Goddess for the festivial!" Claire remembered it was the Goddess Festival. "They will probably pick Karen, the flat drunkard. I'm hoping it's Popuri. What I would give to see that curvy body in a sexy goddess dress...." Claire smacked Jack. "What are you saying? IM YOUR WIFE!" Jack looked at her. "Yeah, but this is a con. You're not curvy at all. Popuri is hot. You...well..you're not." "Just what the hell is your problem?!" Claire shreaked. She stomped angrily and ran off. "Good ridince." Jack smirked as she left. "See yah baby! I'm gonna go check out the goddess hottie! I hope it's Popuri!" He yelled to Claire. She flipped him off as she ran into town.
Karen won.
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Yay, corn!
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Post by Sunberry on Apr 29, 2008 18:18:04 GMT -5
This story is nice to read when you don't have much time on your hands. (Yep- nice short snips of angry people.) (~_~)
Oh, and here are three words for ya': I hate Jack.
Haha! This is the jerkiest version of him I've seen yet. Good job!
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Post by Banika Conchita on Apr 30, 2008 16:46:51 GMT -5
Jack was disappointed with Karen winning. Popuri walked up behind Jack. "Hello!" She said cheerfully. Jack smiled. "Hey! What do you need?" He asked. Jack was hoping she would ask him to dance with her. "Yah gonna cheer your wife up? She's crying." Jack frowned. He ran off to Claire on the bench. He sat down next to her. He put his arm around her and pulled her in close. "S'okay, baby. Chill." Claire backed away. "For the crowd." He whispered. Claire lightly kissed him. "Better than the wedding." Jack said. Than he smiled. "But not good enough." He leaned on top of her and kissed her. She tried to pull away, but than gave in. After a couple minutes of making out, they stopped. "So-so, but better." Jack laughed. Claire scowled. "You jerk. I'm going home." And Claire got up and ran back home.
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Post by Pickle on May 4, 2008 5:25:51 GMT -5
And the chapters come faster now!
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Post by Banika Conchita on May 18, 2008 14:59:48 GMT -5
=)
Thanks...? Lol.
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Post by Simfarmguru on Sept 21, 2008 20:02:10 GMT -5
I have to say, though not big on the concept of this coupling, I enjoy this. More please!
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Post by butterflyflutterby on Sept 22, 2008 10:03:01 GMT -5
Very nice! To tell the truth I didn't think I'd like it at first but it good. MORE!  |
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Post by Pickle on Sept 25, 2008 4:04:40 GMT -5
How shall we convice her to update faster?
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Post by butterflyflutterby on Sept 25, 2008 21:24:28 GMT -5
Shower her with praise!  GO CORNETTE! You're writing is amazing!! |
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GO CORNETTE! You're writing is amazing!!