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Post by jesseleon on May 17, 2008 12:22:16 GMT -5
Hello to all you look at my post. This will be my first Fanfics it call Harvest Moon: Oops
PS: sorry of you see a little words spelled wrong I a bad speller and have bad grammar, so it will take me a long time to writ some of the chapters.
story:
Tom just graduated from high school and all Tom think about starting he's new life. Until he receives letter that come from Forget-Me-Not Volley, Tom's father as be gone missing and leaving know trace behind, and want Tom to ran the farm on his father place. Tom turn down the offer and continued with life, a few day later odd thing started to happen, thing start to break in front of Tom,thing falling down on Tom, and have unlucky thing happening to Tom. Then Tom meet a fortuneteller telling him as be curses and only get one year to live unless he become a farmer, a marred man, and a farther in one year. Tom on a ride for his live, working at the farm he's father gave him, try to find the bride to be, and having a kid of his own does Tom have lucky on his side?
Characters:
Tom:18 years old graduated from high school wish he can spend time with he father at he's farm. Tom handsome,kind, headstrong,and smart.
Lumina: Some age as Tom, Lumina is rish but she want someone you like her and not her money. Lumina is kind,sweet, and easy to upset.
continued on Characters
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Post by Pickle on May 18, 2008 1:19:07 GMT -5
Wow....even I'm blushing.
Out of curiousity either how old are you and what is your native language? And if you wish, I can do some corrections for you for each part of your story. Because I'm nice and I like flaunting my ability to go into post and messing with them.
*gives an evil eye to people*
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Post by jesseleon on May 18, 2008 14:39:26 GMT -5
wow thank you I'm 16 right now I go to 17 tomorrow and my native language is English, thank you
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Post by Rozewater on May 18, 2008 14:47:55 GMT -5
Umm... Wow. That was my first thought. I like the idea of the storyline, but I'm worried that the spelling and grammar will severely take away from it unless remedied.
I'd suggest taking up on Pickle's offer. That way people can enjoy your story more.
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Post by jesseleon on May 18, 2008 17:23:26 GMT -5
Ya I know thank you for worry about my Fanfics
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Post by Pickle on May 19, 2008 1:01:54 GMT -5
Though I am hardly a good speller. Or grammar...thingie.
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Post by jesseleon on May 19, 2008 14:59:21 GMT -5
ya I'm 17 years old be my dog die May 18, 2008 R.I.P T-T
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Post by jennstar97 on Jul 7, 2008 19:43:09 GMT -5
Where is it??
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