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Post by ~Rosie~ on May 8, 2009 17:59:01 GMT -5
The wind blew steadily on the cold winter night. The moon was glowing a deep yellow, the glow of a harvest moon. A girl of about 18 stood in front of a long path, going over the valley walls. Her light blonde hair blew along with the wind. She was waiting. Waiting for something, or someone.
The girl was in a light blue nightgown, and a knit blanket covered her shoulders. She continued to wait, till a few minutes to midnight. That's when her wait was over.
A tall man walked down the path, his silver hair glistening in the moonlight. He had a eager look on his face, as if ready for the girl.
"Skye! You made it!" The girl exclaimed, running into Skye's arms."i was afraid you wouldn't come." The girl said, burying her face in his shirt, taking in his sweet scent.
"Of course I came, silly! You think I would miss seeing you on a harvest moon! that's when lovers are supposed to be together! To watch harvest moon."
((this is the first fanfic i've ever done, so don't be too harsh.))
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Post by Pickle on May 9, 2009 17:57:28 GMT -5
I think it's a lovely start.
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Post by Butterscotch on May 10, 2009 14:46:32 GMT -5
I noticed a few words that should have been captialized weren't, but otherwise it's pretty good.
Although it's short, you capture the mood really well.
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Post by ~Rosie~ on May 10, 2009 19:53:30 GMT -5
thankies
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