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Post by makiaria on May 28, 2005 16:35:58 GMT -5
=O Wow. I just got done catching up on this story. This is very good so far. You are quite a talented writer. I really love what you have so far. Keep up the awesome work! x3
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Post by Butterscotch on May 28, 2005 16:58:57 GMT -5
Thanks! ^-^ I'm only 13, too! Am I still aloowe here, because the intro says it allows anyone OVER 13 to join... It means 13 or older. I fix that! Great chapter. |
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Post by Candyapple on May 28, 2005 17:23:03 GMT -5
awsome chapter! ;D
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Post by Firefly on May 28, 2005 17:54:01 GMT -5
=O Wow. I just got done catching up on this story. This is very good so far. You are quite a talented writer. I really love what you have so far. Keep up the awesome work! x3 Thanks! I'll try my hardest... You guys are going to make me cry. I'm serious. |
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Post by Firefly on May 28, 2005 17:55:03 GMT -5
It means 13 or older. I fix that! Great chapter. Thanks, Butters ^-^ Oh, and, I've got a feeling this Fanfic will be your favorite. -shifty eyes- |
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Post by Butterscotch on May 28, 2005 17:57:09 GMT -5
Thanks, Butters ^-^ Oh, and, I've got a feeling this Fanfic will be your favorite. -shifty eyes- Oh? I like the sound of that! ^-^ |
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Post by Kayla on May 28, 2005 23:22:31 GMT -5
It's great! You're really talented, Pineapple!
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Post by Firefly on May 29, 2005 11:08:41 GMT -5
Chapter 8
I felt terrible. Why had I run from Rick? He had been so good to me all his life, and the thanks he gets is that I run from him. That thought made me stop. I turned. Rick had now caught up with me. His face looked worried.
"Popuri, are you all right? You really scared me there. Did I do something wrong?"
I shook my head.
"I just wanted to say breakfast was ready. Coming?"
I opened my mouth, but shook my head instead. "Actually, I'm not hungry any more."
Now he looked seriously worried. "But you haven't eaten since-"
"Its okay, Rick. I'll come back soon. I just need time to think." I actually smiled a little. He seemed relieved.
"Tell Mom I'll be back soon." I added. Rick nodded at me, and turned to walk back home. I turned as well, and walked away. It was true. I really did need time to think.
As I walked along, I wondered where to go. My legs, though, knew where I should go. I found myself walking by the Church. A lightbulb seemed to go off in my head. Carter! I could always talk to him, and he'd always listen. It was Sunday, anyway. I used to go on Sundays.
"Carter?" I called softly as I entered the Church. No answer. I called louder, "Carter?"
When there was no answer, I wondered where he could be. Maybe he was in the confessional? It seemed reasonable.
"Carter? You here?" I asked as I reached the door. My voice echoed slightly.
Suddenly, a thought came to me. Where did Carter live? I had never seen him at the Inn before. Did he stay here? Sleep on the pews every night? How horrible!
It was then I noticed the door. It occured to me that I had known it was there; I had never given it a second thought. Now, I was extremely curious. I tapped at the wood lightly. He'd never hear that! My hands held the cool metal of the door, and I was surprised to find the door unlocked.
"Carter?" I asked as I opened the door. My breath caught. This was no room; it was another way outside!
It was beautiful. There were small plants-- and many, many mushrooms-- everywhere. It was like a garden.
I heard a laugh. My head whirled around, looking for the cause. My eyes rested on a golden-blonde head. Carter.
"Carter!" I whispered happily. I rushed over to him. I had never been so happy to see him.
"Popuri?" Carter turned and looked at me with surprise. "You're back so soon? How is Kai?"
I felt anger boiling inside of me. "Kai is very happy," I told him through clenched teeth. "He and his twenty girlfriends were at a party a few nights ago."
Carter's look softened. "What happened?" he asked as he sat down beside me.
The whole story poured out. I didn't cry. I just went on, talking about everything that had happened that night.
"I'm so sorry, Popuri," Carter whispered, his eyes sorrowful. I noticed his hand was on mine. "That's horrible." He looked away. "I should have never preformed that marraige." I looked at him curiously.
"You didn't know. Its not your fault."
He looked straight into my eyes. "Maybe I did. He looked... different than most grooms. He didn't seem as nervous, as if he'd done this so many times before. He didn't look exited that he was marrying someone he truly loved. I'm so sorry."
I said nothing. Not because I had never thought of that. Not because that could very well be true. It was because I had never noticed that Carter's eyes were a brilliant, beautiful blue.
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Post by Butterscotch on May 29, 2005 19:12:48 GMT -5
Thanks, Butters ^-^ Oh, and, I've got a feeling this Fanfic will be your favorite. -shifty eyes- You were right! ^-^ I liked the part about Carter's room being filled with mushrooms. |
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Post by Kayla on May 29, 2005 19:13:57 GMT -5
Awww...  |
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Post by Firefly on May 30, 2005 7:42:54 GMT -5
You were right! ^-^ I liked the part about Carter's room being filled with mushrooms. xD Really? I was just thinking what the room would look like, and I remembered Carter likes mushrooms. |
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Post by Candyapple on May 30, 2005 17:43:12 GMT -5
yay! cool chapter!
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Post by Firefly on May 30, 2005 19:13:16 GMT -5
Chapter 9
I shook my head, trying to wake myself up. Idiot! He's a priest! You can't have a crush on a priest! But... it was hard not to. There was something magical about those blue eyes. She had hardly ever seen them. Carter always, always had his eyes closed. I wondered why. It had never really occured to me before. It was something that was there; it was completely normal; another part of everyday life. Just... just like Mom's illness.
"Popuri, are you okay?" He seemed to have noticed the staring. I blushed.
"Er... yeah. I'm great!" I smiled broadly before standing up. "Thanks a lot, Carter. I feel so much better now that I've told you what happened." Did I just say that? I felt myself turn red again. Thankfully, I don't think he noticed.
"You're welcome." He paused and stood up. "You know, I'm really glad I got to talk to you a little more. Not many come here on such a regular basis. I thought I had lost you when you married Kai." He was flushed now. "So... do you think you could come more often, to talk?" he added in a rush.
I smiled. "Of course." I turned to leave. "Bye, Carter!"
"Goodbye, Popuri." He walked me to the front of the Church. I had one last question.
"Will that door always be open?"
He looked at me with open eyes. I almost froze up, but I managed not to look to stupid. "They will be open for you." And he turned and went back inside.
There was something about the way he said those words that sent a shiver up my spine. For you... he had said. Like I was someone special. I hoped I was to him.
Then I shook myself. Come on, Popuri! Are you really that desparate? Falling for the priest? You can be single! Anyway, its not right to be with a priest.
But I'm not with him. We had only talked a little. Its not like he wouldn't have heard the story, anyway. He was, like, 30 something anyway. It was as likely as Cliff confessing his love for Manna.
As I passed the Inn, I heard something crash loudly, and then the door opened and slammed closed. I heard angry, then teary, shouts. I rushed inside.
Ann was sitting at a table, head buried in her arms. Her shoulders and back heaved up and down, and I heard muffled sobs. I ran over to my friend.
"Ann," I softly said. "Are you okay?" I patted her back.
"N-no!" she sobbed, and looked up.
"What's wrong?" I was seriously worried. What could possibly make Ann this upset?
"C-cliff broke up with me!" she cried, buring her head in her arms again.
"What?" I was shocked. Cliff loved Ann. I had heard rumors that he was going to propose to Ann. Ann had even told me she had found a Blue Feather under his pillow when she was cleaning his room! "Why?"
Still keeping her head down, Ann took a deep breath and began. "Well, he was coming back from work wearing the same, dazed look he'd had on for a few weeks now. He then saw me and came over. I hugged him, but he pushed away. He then said it wasn't working, and that he was leaving me!" She broke into sobs again. I waited untill she calmed a bit more. "I asked about the Blue Feather, and he said it wasn't for me. I demanded who it was for, and he yelled at me and through the vase I bought him at the wall. He said he wouldn't tell me, and that I'd find out, anyway. He even moved out! He took all his things and ran out."
I felt awful for Ann. She was a close friend. This was absolutely not fair. "Ann, I'm so sorry..." I told her, also starting to cry. When she saw me cry, though, Ann looked up.
"I didn't want to make you cry. My tiny problems are so unimportant, after what you've been through."
I shook my head. "No, Ann. After what I've been through, every problem is big enough."
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Post by Butterscotch on May 30, 2005 19:22:08 GMT -5
Great chapter! You know, I once wrote a fanfic about that!  |
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Post by moko on May 30, 2005 19:36:06 GMT -5
it's not that i don't like it, it's just because i really like kai.
i don't mean to sound rude, but why does everyone like carter? they all think he's handsome and stuff, but i don't find him handsome at all. in fact, he kinda annoys me (no offense meant to carter fans).
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