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Post by karenfreak on May 10, 2006 2:18:39 GMT -5
Chapter 5: The arranged marriage
Vesta and Marlin loved Celia but she needed to get married soon, she was 25 next month and the nly people who were roughly the sam age was Cody ( 30 ) and Kai ( 23 ) they thought that they'd give it another month or two then decide. After a few months Celia was going out with Kai and they decided Kai it was, Kai still thought that Muffy reminded her of Popuri, yet fancied her just as much as Celia! Vesta and Celia had achat about who too marry! Ceia said that she was only dating Kai and that she loved Marlin really! Kai came at the excact moment! Kai said that he had something to tell CElia, Celia said that there was something she had to tell Kai. They both said at the same time that they loved someone else. They smiled at eachother just as a girl came up. It was a new girl. Celia greeted herself and the new girl sasid that her name was Nami. Celia smiled at Nami and Kai intruduced himself smiling at Celia happily...
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Post by Limegreen Queen on May 10, 2006 17:04:32 GMT -5
O! Yeah more! I like it! PRETTY PLEASE WRITE MORE!
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Post by Herfefiny on May 10, 2006 17:26:52 GMT -5
oooo! this is exciting! ;D
Write more pleases!
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Post by karenfreak on May 13, 2006 12:05:48 GMT -5
Chapter 6: The unarranged visit!
Popuri had just had a little baby girl! She went to DNA it and it said that Kai was her real father! She wouldn't tell Jack, but decided that she, Jack and baby would have a little holiday to Forget-me-not valley! She had to have a chat with Kai! When she asked Jack, he smiled at her and said of course, he even payed to stay for three weeks in a woman named Ruby's inn. When she left she smiled at herself to be paying Kai a visit! When she got there she asked the first person she met where Kai was! The woman said that he lived there! And she pointed at a house, a farm even! Popuri ran up to the farm and knocked on the door! A woman answered, for a second they both thought that they reminded each other of someone when suddenly they remembered who they were! They were sisters! When Pouri was younger there was a fire and her dad died, and she thought that Muffy had died, then Lillia met Basil and Rick was born, Popuri soon took Basil as her father and forgot about muffy! They both snapped out of their daydream and Popuri asked if she could see Kai...
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Post by Limegreen Queen on May 13, 2006 15:35:49 GMT -5
OMG! I didn't see that coming!!!!!!
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Post by Herfefiny on May 13, 2006 22:07:10 GMT -5
So the nRick would be younger then Popuri! *gasp* nice chapter though! BUt surprising!!!  |
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Post by karenfreak on May 14, 2006 2:08:08 GMT -5
By the way, this is a weird one but I hope you like it!
Chapter 7: Baby's friends.
When Popuri saw Kai they had a talk, Popuri told Kai that the little baby in the living room was his and hers little girl! Not Jacks! Kai gasped, he didn't see that coming, Kai and Popuri suggested that Kai say they stay a little while and while Jack and Muffy is aslepp, they run away! With the boby of course, they reckon they should write a letter and they should go to Flowerbud village (SNES) and live a new life there!
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Post by Herfefiny on May 14, 2006 9:58:24 GMT -5
How exciting! XD
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Post by karenfreak on May 19, 2006 1:23:09 GMT -5
Chapter 8: Running away
At night Kai sneaked around paking all the stuff he needed! Then he woke Popuri up and she got the baby ready and got her stuff packed, then they sneaked out of the door and ran to the nearest boat that said Flowerbud village! Muffy and Jack were still asleep and something was happening to Muffy...
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Post by Herfefiny on May 20, 2006 12:19:28 GMT -5
OMG! Something is happening to Muffy???  Great chapter, I cant wait for more. |
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Post by karenfreak on May 21, 2006 3:21:53 GMT -5
Chapter 9: Where are you?
In the morning Muffy woke up to puke! She didn't feel very well at all! When she came back she realised that Popuri and Kai were gone! "Those little 2 timers! She has run away with my husband and their kid!" Muffy ran all around town asking everyone if they'd seen a girl with curly hair, a baby and Kai anywhere, Lumina said that they jumped onto the boat for Flowerbud village! Muffy ran back home and woke Jack up! She explained that they had ran away to Flowerbud village and they had to get him! Jack suddenly woke up and got dressed and ran to the boats, there was one that said Flowerbud village and so they paid and hopped on the boat! The boat ride would take a few days and so they had their own little cabin! The second Muffy saw a bed she flopped on it and although it was only 3:00pm she fell into a peaceful sleep!
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Post by Herfefiny on May 21, 2006 13:33:37 GMT -5
It was a good chapter, but thres to many unessecary exclamtion points (!)
Other wise, it's great.
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Post by me on May 21, 2006 14:17:04 GMT -5
Is there a purpose for Muffy being sick, or is it just for something interesting? Try putting some periods (.) instead of ! ! ! ! because while they usually make things sort of stand out, if you put too many, they sort of lose their meaning. I love the story though so far! Keep making more chapters! yay! yay!
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Post by karenfreak on May 22, 2006 10:27:09 GMT -5
Sorrry, i like them.
Chapter 10: Finding a place
Well Kai and Popuri were long gone by then and after a day they reached Flowerbud village (they left at 11:00pm and Muffy left at 3:00pm that means that they would get there 16 hrs before Muffy!) They jumped off the boat and went to have a look around, they met a girl named Eve who seemed to be flirting with Kai! Popuri went up to her and said that if she touched Kai she would have a broken nose. Eve backed away then. Kai and Popuri found a farm for sale and they took it. They knew that soon Muffy would catch on them and they would have to move agin. BUt they didn't worry until then and they just went on with their lives, Kai bought a sheep and a chicken and then went for a wander, it turned 9:00pm and he didn't come back!
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Post by karenfreak on May 22, 2006 13:53:32 GMT -5
Chapter 11: Missing
Popuri waited until mignight then went to search, She went too the beach, where he said he was going, and she looked everwhere but he wasn't there! She saw a boat and she saw a tumble of blonde curls coming off and so Popuri sprinted to the nearest house and it turned out that it was a bar ( Eves bar ), when Eve saaw her she burst out laughing, Popuri stomped to Eve and asked where Kai was, Eve suddenly looked surprised! Eve said that she was only laughing because there was toilet paper stuck to her shoe. POpuri asked Eve if she would help her search. Eve said that she would and they looked, then when it was nearly 7:00am they gave up, Popuri walked home but in Anns house she saw then snogging! Popuri entered and slapped Kai, Ann smiled and asked if this was the mother! Kai said that it ewas and Popuri ran home crying, but when she got home Muffy was there. Popuri tried to walk back out but they saw her, she ran onto the nearest boat, now she somewhere new but single...
Could you please think of new places? NOt Sth or MM because I don't have them
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Great chapter, I cant wait for more.