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Post by pendulous threads on Dec 1, 2005 7:02:11 GMT -5
To anyone who hasn't read Melody...
Melanie and Brandon are Melody and Cliff's children. Jonathan is Popuri and Gray's child.
The first chapter isn't the greatest but I had to start it out somehow, right?
Chapter One: Family[/u]
"I'm going to go see Jonathan, mom!" I yelled through the house. Mom popped her head out of the closet she was cleaning and sighed.
"Melanie, you two have been spending a lot of time together lately." she said. "Why don't you spend some time with us for one night. Please?"
"Okay, mom." I mumbled. Suddenly something from earlier popped into my head. "Oh yeah, you got a letter from some guy named Richard in the mail."
"Pitch it." she replied. She took her head back into the closet and started shuffling things around again. My dad rushed out of the laundry room, carrying my basket of clothes into mine and Brandons room. I followed him, pitching the letter on the way. Something came flying at me and hit me in the head as I entered the room.
"You idiot!" I yelled at Brandon. I realized he had hit me in the head with one of his shoes, and I made a face.
"Melanie, I want you to put your clothes away, and then make dinner." dad said, rushing back out of the room. "Oh yeah, I also want you to clean the bathroom."
"IT'S BRANDON'S TURN DAD!" I yelled. Brandon stuck his tongue out and hit me with his other shoe. I lunged onto him and started punching him in the stomach. He tried to wrestle me off but soon mom came in and pulled me off of him.
"Come on Melanie. Stop being so hot-headed." she spat. "You two need to get along. Who know's how much longer you two could be together in this family. When I was 14..."
"Yeah mom, you have told us that story 20 gazillion times already." Brandon said, rolling his eyes at her.
"Just remember how important family is." she sighed, pointing a finger at us. "You should spend as much time with me as possible. You know I have had many near death expiriences, trying to save your father." Dad stepped up behind her and wrapped his arms around her.
"And I thank you for taking those chances of saving me." he said sweetly, batting his eyes lashes. "I felt really bad." Dad looked over at us. "Never go near Duke when he is drunk. Just, trust me on that one okay?"
"And run away if he has a gun near by." mom added. They laughed and left the room to finish their chores around the house. I shrugged and got out my diary to express my feelings in. I flipped through some pages occasionally glancing at all the 'I LOVE JONATHAN!' things I wrote. Of course I liked him. He was my mom's best friend's son. Or you could just say my best friend. I have known him since the day we were born!
"I wuv Jonathan..tee hee hee." Brandon mimicked me from his bed. I threw him a nasty look and slammed the diary shut. I threw it across the room and it hit the wall.
"LET'S NOT BE THROWING THINGS!" Dad called from another room. I sighed angrily and went to see mom.
"Can I please go see Jonathan now? It's not like I'm spending time with you guys anyways." I said, stomping my foot. "You're cleaning!"
"I guess so, honey." my mom answered. "I'm just...one of those over protective parents. You know? But I'm warning you, you better listen when I tell you something." I nodded and ran out the door, seeing a guy with brown hair and green eyes walking towards the door. I shrugged and kept on running to Jonathan's.
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Post by moko on Dec 1, 2005 12:11:49 GMT -5
oh my goodness! who could the stranger be?! lol  |
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Post by pendulous threads on Dec 1, 2005 14:29:17 GMT -5
...Who do you think? Lol, it's kind of obvious...well maybe not. I dont know.
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Post by Firefly on Dec 1, 2005 16:26:33 GMT -5
I don't think its boring! Its a nice start... and I think I'm sure who the stranger is...
However, I do want to know what Melanie looks like. Maybe, instead of having Cliff's personality, she can have is brown hair or brown eyes, or maybe both. Just a suggestion...
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Post by pendulous threads on Dec 1, 2005 16:28:09 GMT -5
In the last chapter on Melody I had it so that she had brown hair and blue eyes. Brandon will have the same...after I change that part on the last chapter of Melody. I just remember they were twins. ^_^ They both have brown hair and blue eyes.
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Post by pendulous threads on Dec 1, 2005 16:36:34 GMT -5
Here is a description of all the characters...the ones that aren't originally in the game anyways...
Melody~
Eye Color: Blue
Hair Color: Blonde
Weight: 120
Height: 5ft. 7in.
Age (In Melody): 17
Age (In Melanie): 32
Melanie~
Eye Color: Blue
Hair Color: Brown
Weight: 105
Height: 5ft. 5in.
Age: 15
Brandon~
Eye Color: Blue
Hair Color: Brown
Weight: 114
Height: 5ft. 11in.
Age: 15
If you want more detail just ask me.
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Post by pendulous threads on Dec 1, 2005 18:34:04 GMT -5
Okay cool! Thanks...oh yeah I forgot Jon's description...
Jonathan~
Eye Color: Blue
Hair Color: Blond
Weight: 117
Height: 5ft. 10in.
Age: 15
I didn't want him to look much like Popuri...so I made him look like Gray. ^_^ A boy with pink hair...lol...no.
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Post by Firefly on Dec 1, 2005 20:24:05 GMT -5
Ohhh, thank you. I don't remember reading how they looked, but... -shrug- That's me for ya.
xD I can see it now... Jon the pink-haired wonder!
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Post by pendulous threads on Dec 2, 2005 7:12:58 GMT -5
Lol, that would be quite funny. If Melanie's favorite color was pink, I'm sure she wouldn't mind.
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Post by Firehead on Dec 2, 2005 7:37:51 GMT -5
It's good!
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Post by pendulous threads on Dec 2, 2005 15:13:57 GMT -5
Thanks. Here is more.
Chapter Two: Stuck Out There
"Oh, hello Melanie." Popuri greeted as I walked into their house across from Poultry Farm. "Did you come to see Jon? Sorry, he isn't here. I think he went up to the Goddess Pond." I nodded and left the way I came in. I ran up to the Goddess Pond and found Jon sitting near the edge of the water.
"Hey." I said. "What's wrong?" I asked, taking a spot of the ground beside him. He just sat there staring at the water. "Jon?"
"Nothing is wrong. I was just thinking." he answered quickly. He looked over at me and smiled. "Stop worrying so much about me, Mel. So, how is your brother?"
"The same. He is still a pain in the rear end. Today he threw his shoes at me." I sighed. "I wish I was an only child. And I wish mom wasn't so over protective. Why is she anyways? I can take care of myself." I crossed my arms and kept my gaze on Jon.
"Mom's are just like that. You wouldn't want mine." he started. "My mom is crazy. When dad does want to go shopping she gets really angry and her eyes glow red, and her hair gets frizzy. Then she rises off the ground like some kind of witch and..."
"Jon, stop being so sarcastic." I giggled. "Your mom is cool. She buys me all kinds of stuff my mom would never buy. She buys me skirts, and jewelry. My mom wouldn't allow me to have such things, but I only wear them when her and dad are out in town or something."
"Would you cry if I died?" Jon suddenly asked. This question hit me hard, and I didn't know how to respond. Finally I managed to get words out.
"Of course, your my best friend, Jon." I said. "W-why? Why did you ask?" He shrugged and looked back at the water.
"You had better get home." he mumbled. "Your mom will be worried about you."
"Will you walk with me?" I asked sweetly. "Please? I don't wan to go alone. It's starting to get dark." Jon just sat there and finally turned to look at me.
"Sorry, Mel. I'm going to stay here a little while longer to think." he answered. "I'm sure you will be fine on your own." I sighed angrily and started towards the house. Once I was almost to the farm I heard someone screaming. It sounded like mother.
"I TOLD YOU TO GO AWAY! DON'T COME BACK!" she screamed. She stood in the doorway with a broom and a basket. She set the basket down, and I noticed the man I saw earlier standing only a couple feet away from her. She grabbed something out of the basket and threw it. Soon enough she was going crazy, hurling eggs at the man standing there.
"Melody, stop it!" he shrieked. He was covered in yolk, and had his hands held out in front of him to block any more eggs mother might throw at him. "I just wanted to see if you changed your mind yet, about us being together again."
"DOES IT LOOK LIKE I WANT TO BE WITH YOU?" she screamed back. "Richard you idiot! Go away! I won't ever change my mind! I'm married and have kids!" she started to throw more eggs, making him flee from the premises. She noticed me standing on the property and motioned me inside.
"Mom, what was that all about?" I asked once I got inside. Dad rushed over and embraced mom.
"You okay, Sweetie?" he asked. She nodded and sighed. "Is he gone?"
"Yes, he is gone." mom said proudly. "I hope he dies in that hurricane!"
"What hurricane?" I asked. Brandon came over to us and glanced at me. "What hurricane?" I repeated. No one answered me until finally dad opened his mouth.
"The one that is coming. It's moving in pretty fast. It should be here any minute now." he said. "I want you all to stay away from windows and doors. They could break easily, and the glass could cut you, or the door could knock you in the head or something."
"You guys are to over protective about hurricanes!" Brandon sneered. Mom shot him a dirty look.
"I almost died in one before young man." she said. "I ran away up to the Goddess Pond and went inside the cave. Then when your dad came to find me a tree was falling towards him so I pushed him out of the way, and got stuck under it myself! Now you DO NOT tell me that I am over protective about hurricanes because..." but she didn't finish because the house started shaking as the wind picked up. Suddenly something in my head clicked.
"Mom, he is still out there! Near the Goddess Pond!" I screeched. "He is still out there!"
"Melanie, who it 'he?'" she asked forcefully, taking hold of my shoulders. "Melanie, answer me! Who is still out there?"
"'He' could only mean Jonathan." Brandon chuckled.
"I'm sure he got home just in time Melanie." dad said from across the room. "Don't worry about it." But I did worry. I worried for 10 more minutes while I sat at the kitchen table with my head resting on my hand. Suddenly the door flew open and a soaked Popuri ran in.
"My baby is still out there!" she gasped.
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Post by Firefly on Dec 2, 2005 16:33:12 GMT -5
Dun dun dun! =o Poor Jon! ;__________; MELANIE! SAVE HIM! SAAAAAAAAAVE HIIIIIIM!
Awesome chapter. |3
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Post by Firehead on Dec 2, 2005 16:44:02 GMT -5
Dun dun dunnnnnn
Deja vu?
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Post by pendulous threads on Dec 2, 2005 17:21:08 GMT -5
Kinda I guess. I can't give you any hints on what will happen next though. I will post it tonight after I finish the third chapter...
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Post by Firefly on Dec 2, 2005 17:25:39 GMT -5
Oh, okay. Take your time. Rushing never helps. Dx I would know...
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