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Arrival
May 25, 2006 19:27:14 GMT -5
Post by Firehead on May 25, 2006 19:27:14 GMT -5
Arrival
Prologue: Departure
Pit,pat,pit,pat. The rain slammed against the window of the car. Thats all there ever was. Rain and thunder in the forecast for the next few days. Great. I was thinking to myself again. I pounded my fist against the window.
"We're not gonna make it." My mother looked over at me.
"Of course we will honey," I shook my head and she turned over to look ahead. "You've said that a thousand times and I'm tired of it. We will get there!" she was trying to comfort me. It wasn't working. I looked at her and then looked back at the window.
"There it is!" I pointed and smiled. she pressed on the brake and wiped her eyes.
"I-I-I'll miss you honey" she reached over and gave me a hug,
"Mom I'll be fine. Grandpa's there and he can watch me. Besides, you can walk me to the dock." She nodded,sobbed,and got out of the car. We walked over to the dock and said our last goodbyes. I hugged her and she hugged me back. We hugged for about a minute. Then I released and she wiped her eyes again. I turned around and got on the boat.
Authors Note: I will be writing more of this fanatic! I finally started one! I hope you guys Lille it! -Cloud AKA Zac AKA Wesker.
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Arrival
May 25, 2006 19:33:38 GMT -5
Post by melody on May 25, 2006 19:33:38 GMT -5
This is very good so far! I like it. More soon please.
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Arrival
May 25, 2006 19:35:05 GMT -5
Post by Firehead on May 25, 2006 19:35:05 GMT -5
Okay^^ I'll upsate as soon as possible.
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Arrival
May 25, 2006 19:36:13 GMT -5
Post by melody on May 25, 2006 19:36:13 GMT -5
Ok, great!
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Arrival
May 25, 2006 19:39:45 GMT -5
Post by allmighty on May 25, 2006 19:39:45 GMT -5
It's good, but there's a lot of spelling mistakes. It's prologue, not prolouge.
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Arrival
May 25, 2006 19:43:53 GMT -5
Post by melody on May 25, 2006 19:43:53 GMT -5
Oh, and when you use commas, make sure to put a space between the comma and the word.
Like this- Pit, pat, pit, pat.
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Arrival
May 25, 2006 19:43:57 GMT -5
Post by Firehead on May 25, 2006 19:43:57 GMT -5
Okay^^ Thank you^^
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Arrival
May 25, 2006 21:58:30 GMT -5
Post by Herfefiny on May 25, 2006 21:58:30 GMT -5
I liked it! I can't wait for more! ;D
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Arrival
May 29, 2006 9:38:59 GMT -5
Post by Firehead on May 29, 2006 9:38:59 GMT -5
Thanks guys^^ Chapter One: The Ferry, and The Death"Now departing for Mineral Town! I repeat now departing for Mineral Town!" Jack ran up to the lady that was standing behind a small counter in front of the ferry. He handed her his ticket and she motioned toward the boat. I ran up to it and stared at it for a moment. I looked around to see if there was anyone else on, but I couldn't fund very many people. Mineral Town must not be a crowded place. I thought. About a minute after I had that thought, a guy with chocolate brown hair walked onto the boat. He had something on his shoulder. It appeared to be a bird. He walked over to me. "Hello there. My names Cliff, how about you." Rain drizzled on his face. It still hadn't let up. I looked over to him and said, “I’m Jack." I stuck my hand out and he looked puzzled. I moved my hand up and down. Still no response. "You’re supposed to shake my hand." "Ohh!" he stuck his hand out, grabbed mine and shook it. I nodded. The bird threw it's head in the air and let out a big "Ca-caw!!" Cliff looked around. "Jay! Be quiet! You know your not supposed to be loud!" he turned to the lady behind the counter and she gave him a mean look. Cliff just waved back at her. Like nothing happened, even though she very well saw it happen herself. Cliff smiled and petted the top of the birds head. “He’s a Falcon.” I nodded. “Where did you buy a bird like that? It’s amazing!” I was astonished by the bird. “Buy? Oh! You mean with money? I don’t buy stuff, I have a tight budget you see. But I found Jay in a forest in Mineral Town. He had a broken wing, so I fixed him up.” He lifted the falcons wing to reveal a spot where the wing had been broken. The rain continued. "Ouch." he nodded and let the wing back down. "Yeah, I dont know how it happened thou-" he was cut off by a girl with orange hair and overalls on popped around the corner. Her hair was wet in the rain. "Hi Cliff!" she waved and ran over to us. "Hey Ann." he smiled a wide smile and laughed. "This is Jack." he pointed to me. I smiled and blushed. "Hi Jack! Is this your first time going to Mineral Town?" I shook my head. "No. I've been here before. It was a long time ago. My grandpa lives there." she nodded her head. "He was a nice man." her smile faded and she rested her hand on my shoulder. Was? What does she mean he was a nice man? She must know him really well and she hasnt seen him in a while."Arriving at Mineral Town! Gather your items and get ready to exit the boat." I picked up my suitcase and my rucksack and headed to the boarding place. Which was also where I would get off. They set the small board from the dock to the ferry. As I got off a small, plump man greeted me and walked me too the house I was to stay in with my grandpa. "I'm sorry to hear about your loss...." his voice trailed off. "What loss?" why had two people now told me they were sorry?" "Didnt you know? The old man......er.....Your grandfather passed away about six months ago." He frowned. "Thats not true! He was alive!" my eyes swelled up with tears. He turned and took to what appeared to be a church. And I saw a grave. On it read. A Loving Grandpa and Father 1947-2006 Zac Estes My knees gave out beneath me. And I crumbled to the ground. Crushed. The man turned around and walked away. About an hour later. I was awaken by a girl and everything around me was the color of blue or white. Authors Note: Ha! I inserted myself into the story! Well, can anyone guess where Jack awakens? Find out in the next chapter! Zac
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Arrival
May 29, 2006 11:27:02 GMT -5
Post by melody on May 29, 2006 11:27:02 GMT -5
I really like it, Zac! I can't wait for the next chapter. ( Psst. Cliff's bird is named Cain)
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Arrival
May 29, 2006 11:58:44 GMT -5
Post by Herfefiny on May 29, 2006 11:58:44 GMT -5
That was great! ;D I bet he wakes up at...the clinic! Or maybe tha Inn...
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Arrival
May 29, 2006 12:01:54 GMT -5
Post by Firehead on May 29, 2006 12:01:54 GMT -5
( Psst. Cliff's bird is named Cain) I knew he had a bird but I didnt know its name. When does he get the bird?
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Arrival
May 29, 2006 12:15:21 GMT -5
Post by melody on May 29, 2006 12:15:21 GMT -5
No one knows when he got it, but in HM64, we learn the bird's name is Cain. It's ok, Zac. It's a really good story so far. Keep up the good work!
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Arrival
May 29, 2006 13:42:08 GMT -5
Post by Firehead on May 29, 2006 13:42:08 GMT -5
Thanks^^ I'll update as soon as I can.
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Post by Firehead on Jun 7, 2006 8:20:42 GMT -5
Chapter Two: The Checkup
"Doctor! He's awake!" I sat up in what felt to be a bed and with my eyes half-open, saw a brunette girl standing in the doorway with a clipboard in her hand. A few moments later, a man with black hair and a white robe came in.
"How are you feeling?" he pulled a pen out of his pocket and looked at me. Waiting for a reply. I scratched my head, and noticed my hat wasn't on. I looked to the left and saw a small desk. My hat was resting on a magazine. I took it off the desk and place it on my head backward.
"I feel fine. My head just hurts a little..." my voice trailed off as I rubbed my head.
"I see. I see" he scratched something down on the paper and looked back up. "Anything else?"
"Not really." I pulled my hands out from underneath the blanket and saw small scars scattered across my hand. I set them back down underneath the blanket and felt a small sting from them.
"Do you know why you collapsed?" he asked.
"No, I don't. Do you think you could explain to me?" he nodded. The brunette walked out of the room.
"Of course. Have you ever heard of stamina and fatigue? If your going to keep that up, then you must rest every now and then. In other words, go to sleep on time. I know how teenagers are. They stay up until who knows when. Also when you get tired you need to take-" he was cut off by the brunette girl, who walked back in the room.
"One of these when you get tired." she was holding a small bottle. I took the bottle and examined it. It read "Turbojolt." she handed me another bottle and it read "Bodigizer"
"Thanks Doc." I said to him smiling. He looked at me.
"Please, call me Tim and...." his voice faded and he turned to the brunette, ".....and this is Elli."
"It's nice to meet you, uh...."
"Jack." I said.
"It's nice to meet you Jack!" Elli finished her sentence. "Well, since you fainted, you will have to be staying here for a while. Would you like anything?"
"A glass of water if it isn't to much trouble."
"Not at all!" she said. And with that, she walked out of the room, Tim following her like a lost puppy. A few moments later, Elli returned.
"Here's your water." she had glass in her hand. She looked me in the eyes and I blushed. "Are you alright?" I nodded and she set the water on the table. "Well call me if you need anything!"
"Oh, I will." she spun on one heel and left the room. I turned over to the table and grabbed the glass and took a long gulp. When I was finished, the glass was halfway full, and halfway empty. I thought about why I had fainted and remembered grandpa's grave. I wanted to go look at it some more. Even though it would tear my heart in two. I layed back down in my bed.
I'm going to see that grave tonight. My eyes closed and I fell asleep. Hoping to wake up in the middle of the night.
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